老眼 ： farsightedness due to old age
医学用語での老眼 ： presbyopia
遠近両用の眼鏡 ： bifocalsもしくはbifocal spectacles
老眼鏡は reading glasses というしかない。

● 翻訳のスタイルについて

一般的に文が長いと、それを訳す翻訳者のconcernの順序は
1. Finish on time（提出期限に間に合わせること）
2. Accuracy（翻訳内容・用語の正確さ）
3. Style / tone（どのように表現するか）

となり、逆に文が短いとconcernの順序は
1. Accuracy
2. Style /tone
3. Finish on time
となる。

今回はテキストが短かったので、見直しの時間も多くて accuracy が高く、つまらない mistake が少なかったとのこと。また、各訳者が style に重きを置いているのがよくわかり、それぞれの個性が出ていたようだ。

• ここで重要なのは、accuracy と style の兼ね合いで、場合によっては、accuracy よりも、attractiveness に重きを置いた style を選ぶことが大切となる。
  読者層を意識して、その人たちにとって情報が（もしくはその情報によって伝わる商品や企業のイメージが）attractive でなければならない。
  Who wants your information? を常に意識する。
  読者が一般大衆であったら、あまり最先端のハイテク用語を使わないこと。そのような用語に馴染みのない読者もいると思われるので、その人たちをバカにしたかのような印象を与えないように注意する。

Mobile Notebook Personal Computers

In today's business scene, mobile notebook personal computers (mobile PC) are an indispensable business tool. Several years ago, the only thing a mobile PC was used for was schedule management or word processing. Nowadays, however, it's hardly unusual for mobile PCs to be used for more sophisticated tasks such as making presentations. And performance continues to improve even as we speak. A number of mobile devices have appeared with capabilities that rival those of desktop computers.

1. Since the article is talking about a specific type of computer (personal computers), you may want to use this term, at least in the beginning when introducing it.
2. As you are introducing the type of computer here, you should choose one of these forms: "The mobile notebook computer is" or "Mobile notebook computers are.
3. I think it would be better if you used "notebook computers" or "mobile notebook PCs" because the article is talking about a specific type of computer; notebook computers.
4. This phrase needs to set off with commas: "However, as you can see, today's…"
5. This phrase doesn't flow too well. You might want to try "…most presentations today are done…"
6. This segment expresses a completely different idea, so it may be better to make this a separate sentence.
7. This segment is probably not necessary. The sentence is smoother without it.
8. To make the comparison clearer, you need to establish what part of the desktop computers is the same as notebook PCs. So, you need to mention "….have specifications comparable to those of reliable…"

1. This is probably okay, but you might want to check to see if paraphernalia describes only small objects or also includes OA equipment and other devices.
2. I think the word order would be better as "…active roles at the frontlines of business,"
3. This segment needs a verb to help separate it from the first half of the sentence. Right now, it's a bit hard to figure out how marketing presentations are included in something. Perhaps "…frontlines of business, where they are used to make marketing presentations."
4. Would "Vendors" be the only type of people who are offering notebook models?

1. Is there a particular reason why you chose to use this phrase? There is no reference to this in the original Japanese and it's difficult to see why the use has to be limited to "individual sales rep."
2. You may want to try a different phrase here. This phrase generally means "things happen or change on a daily basis."
3. I'm not sure you want to say that this has been "allowed." This sounds like mobile notebook PCs need permission to enter the market.
4. Probably the word "specs" would work okay here.
5. I think another word such as "equivalent to" or "comparable to" would work better here (I personally do not use "like" so often).

1. This would probably sound better if it is changed to "…a crucial piece of gear"
2. A verb describing what is common practice may make this segment easier to understand; for example "…is now common practice for handling such important…"
3. This should be plural; "business presentations"
4. Because the usage of "actually" and "literally" are pretty much the same, this is a bit redundant. You don't need to use them together.

1. Not just "at work" but for all people who work. You might want to say"…device for anyone who works" or "… device for all working persons"
2. This needs to be the plural form.
3. This should probably be "…common devices for making presentations at meetings."
4. Since improvements are constantly being made, the verb tense here should probably be "…is constantly being improved"
5. This should probably be "…many of the latest model mobile computers…"
6. "Competitive" is generally used to describe prices or marketability. If you are referring to the functions and capabilities, you should probably used "comparable" or "equivalent to."

Now, what should you look for in a mobile PC in addition to the three fundamental features of high specs, light weight, and durability? First of all, you should check to see how long the device can run on its battery. Battery life is the feature that a mobile PC lives or dies by. Because you are mobile, the assumption is that you are out and about, and probably not near an electrical outlet. It won't matter how high-tech your device is; if you run out of juice in the middle of a task, things can look pretty bad. At the very least, you need to have a battery that will give you a half-day's worth of work-on-the-go. Another important but often overlooked feature is the AC adaptor. Because you need to have one of these when you are traveling on business, you should choose a mobile PC that comes with an AC adaptor that is as compact and lightweight as possible.

1. Although the Japanese original says "…next…" or "…follows…", the idea here is closer to saying something about "Well, what else is there in addition to the three basic…"
2. You need an indefinite article here: "an unavoidable"
3. This isn't very smooth. You may want to rearrange the word order. "No matter how high the notebook PC's specs are, it is useless…"
4. This just means "outdoors", so you may need to be more specific about what you mean
5. I think the idea here is not so much the wall socket, but the need to recharge the battery.
6. These two sentences could be joined together to form one nicely flowing sentence. Use a comma.

1. Although the Japanese original does mention something about "…next…", I think it is not necessarily meant to express the idea of "next" or "following." I think it is more along the lines of "what else" or "in addition to."
2. The basic meaning of "hardly" is correct, but the usage is a bit different. In this sentence, a better word is "seldom." The word "hardly" is generally used in conjunction with an absolute, such as "She ate hardly any dinner" or "I hardly ever buy brand name goods."
3. It may be a good idea to be consistent in what you call this device; sometimes it is referred to as "notebook" and other times "mobile" and still other times "mobile notebook PC." Although it is good to use a variety of expressions to keep the article from sounding monotonous, it is necessary to make sure that you have established that all of the names refer to the same item.
4. I don't believe there is a phrase such as "half a… while you are" Is this a typing mistake?
5. I think this segment would flow much more smoothly if you insert "….adaptor that is as compact as…"

1. It may not be a good idea to number this item "the fourth" since there is no indication of using a numbering system in the original Japanese.
2. The way this is written, it sounds like the fate is the thing that is escaping. Also, why "fate"?
3. Actually, it isn't difficult at all to get power from an outlet if you are using a notebook PC as a mobile. You need to express that it's difficult to use a notebook PC when you are on the move.
4. This should probably be "running it on the battery."
5. This should be "will cause problems" or "may cause trouble."
6. "Long enough to allow you to …" sounds better, I think.
7. I think the word order here should be "…outside the office for at least half a day."
8. This should be "…to bring along"
9. This sounds strange or incomplete. Do you want to say "…bring along on business trips"? Why do you need "..such as.."?
10. Do you want to say that you forget to buy an adaptor or do you mean to say you have an adaptor but forget to use it? This is a bit vague.

1. I think this sentence would read more smoothly if you could rearrange it a little. "What is nearly as important as high specifications, lightweight, and sturdiness, the three basics for a mobile?" Or something like this.
2. This should be the definite article "the.
3. This is a little vague. It may be a little clearer if you could explain what you mean by the battery being a bottleneck. Is it the lack of capacity or the limit to the amount of charge of the battery?
4. What is a mobile environment? Does an environment move around? You might want to clarify this by explaining "Most environments where a person would be on the move…" or something similar to this.
5. This is probably okay, but perhaps a bit redundant. It's probably enough to say "…last long enough to complete…"
6. I don't know if "you" can ensure that the battery will last half a day. You should probably say that "You should make sure your battery lasts for at least half a day…"
7. This needs to be "will"
8. Check grammar rule concerning the use of "that" and "which"
9. Do you think it is clear that you are referring to an adaptor and not a battery here?
10. The correct phrase is "out of the office"

1. A different verb might be better here. It's a little vague what you mean by "come next to…" You might try "What should be considered…" or some other similar verb.
2. A different preposition may be better; for example "for."
3. I'm not sure if this phrase would be understood by the reader. Perhaps "Battery life" or "Battery capacity" would work.
4. Indefinite article "an" is more appropriate here, I think.
5. See above explanation.
6. The preposition "for" should be put in here; "…to your computer for at least …"
7. This needs to be in the plural form.

A：PCのスペックを見ると、駆動時間の意味でbattery lifeと書かれているので、問題ないと思われる。battery life=battery hours

Another feature you want to check is how much can be seen on the mobile PC's LCD screen. If you are the only person who will be looking at the screen, the number of pixels it can display may not be a concern. But mobile PCs are now used for displaying information to other people, such as when making a presentation. If the screen isn't able to display the images clearly or the images are cut off, you aren't conveying the full message or information to the viewers.

1. This phrase may not be necessary. If you feel you must use something here, "…at one time…" may work better.
2. This segment doesn't really contribute to the general idea of the sentence and also narrows the scope of the meaning, so I would suggest leaving it out.
3. Rather than a word that suggests an ongoing action (increasing), I think just saying "more cases…" is more clear. Or you could reconstruct this part to say "These days, however, it is becoming increasingly common for multiple persons to share…"
4. This phrase should be either "…lose your edge if you fail to communicate…" or "…lose your edge by failing to communicate…"

1. Wrong preposition here. Your sentence says that people use PCs by means of presenting the screen to others. You don't mean this, do you?
2. The word "in" is not necessary here.
3. There should be a definite article here; "…if a part of the information…"
4. Probably you could use "it" here.
5. This may be a little confusing because you are using the word "message" for the first time. How is "message" different or similar to "information"? What message are you talking about?

1. I think "provides" works better here.
2. I think this sentence would easier to follow if you broke it into two separate sentences
3. Perhaps you should just say "other viewers" rather than saying "your counterparts"

1. The next requirement is not "about" the volume of information. It "is" the volume of information.
2. Wrong word. This should be "seldom."
3. I think "…don't have to be concerned about it," is better.
4. I don't think we really share the display with others. We allow others to view it.
5. This is missing a word; "…from a display or it is hard to see…"
6. You may not want to limit this to just when making a presentation. You want to convey information to viewers at all times.

「液晶画面」をどう表現するか？

LCDは技術を指しているので、液晶画面はLCD panel もしくはLCD screen と表現する。monitorはテレビの画面を指す言葉なので、適さない。

「情報の一部が切れていたり・・・」の意味は？

画面のピクセル数が1280× 960や1024× 768では、ネットの画面が切れることなく表示されるが、800×600の画面だと、端が切れて見えないことがある。そのことを言っている。

Q：「情報の一部」の訳にimageが使われているが、textまでもimageと表現すると誤解を招くのでは？

A： what is on the screen（画面上に表示されているもの）をまとめてimageと表現したつもり。

• テキスト4に、「３つの基本の次に求めるべきもの」というくだりがあります。これを素直に読めば、どうしても next、follow、after などを使うことになります。重要な基本条件を「最初」に確保して、次に求めるべきは・・・、というロジックになんら違和感をおぼえません。しかし、Gregさんの場合、原文の「次に」を認識しつつも基本条件を「中核」に確保し、他に求めるべきは・・・（what else in addition to…）となっています。そして、この思考様式がより自然であるという英語ネイティブのわれわれに対する助言は示唆に富んでいます。